Who's Taylor? I thought the leading man's name was Robert.
Ahhh, yes the tired old love triangle and scorned woman bent on revenge stereotype. "Tie Me Up, Tie Me Down" (a love story with strings attached) this is not. He goes to her apartment for "one last date" and she laces his drink with a sleep potion... come on guys use a little more imagination and less predictability.
I was the videographer and editor on Beam. I enjoyed your film. It was predictable like others have said, but that didn't bother me. The flow of the film and story tension kept me interested to the end. Have you produced any other films? If so, I'd like to check them out.
I liked this film. I knew where it was going, but it was entertaining.
The one thing in the story that I didn't get was why he agreed to go out with this woman again, when he obviously had no interested in her and she was TOTALLY INSANE!
Thanks for your comments... sorry I did not get back to you earlier, but I'm posting from the remote office in WV (a.k.a. Mom's house), and web access is kind of sporadic.
While I do agree with some other's statements that I could tell where it was going from the beginning, it still held my attention. The soundtrack kept pulling me in for one, and the actress who played Caitlin was extremely convincing.
Ignore Movie Critic. He/she is a bastard with a superiority complex on a power kick. What type of constructive criticism is "yuck." He/she has all the articulation of a two-year-old.
What is the DEAL with the chain around his neck? He is barely restrained. His hands are free and he could easily grab her or free himself.
I am expecting Kathy Bates in "Misery" with the plate of food and when we come walking through the door, and then we'll find James Caan strapped to the bed by angles and wrists and instead he is sitting with a flimsy chain around his neck.
Bogus! You've got to d a little reality check when shooting the film. Does his condition look like he is really confined and unable to get free?
It's Kellen from "Gutless Wonder". With all of the videos on here it's exciting to see the works of others and to be accompanied by many worthy participants. I believe that constructive criticism is one of the best things to hear, especially if it's presented in a suitable way. With your short, I believe that you have talent. And that's the key, because if you work hard you'll enhance your strengths.
I agree with some of the other comments that your story is a bit weak. This type of story has been done before, but there's always minor changes in the story that can be made to spice things up.
The music is worthy of noting. One suggestion is to not even have it playing in the beginning. Right when it came on I knew something bad was going to happen because of the mood of the music. Maybe start things out like they're pleasant, it's just another day for your main character. Then, when things start to get creepy with the girl kick in the music. Keep the viewer guessing constantly.
Another thing you can also corporate in your future films in to work with lighting. Lighting can do a lot. I never used to use it and many of my shots were dull and boring. Lighting can create depth and layers. You utilized this in the scene outside the house where he asks his girlfriend to marry him. One scene where I think you could have used some shadows is where she has him chained in the basement. That could make it very unsettling.
But hey, I'll shut up now. Sorry to write a novel on your comments page.
I think the main problem I had with this story is that I didn't like any of the characters. The guy was creepy and not likable, the stalker bitch was one dimensional and unsympathetic and even his brother and his girlfriend lacked motivation and integrity to make them interesting.
Women who stalk men for whom the hold affection or a fantasy of coupling could be a very interesting subject in short film. BUT you have to, a some point like and see the chemistry click between the stalker and her target.
I don't think you researched this topic at all. Do you or did you go to college? This was written as if you have never had much experience in life or if you went to a school where they never taught you to look below the surface of anything and dig for some deeper meaning.
Your film doesn't need to be complex or layered with abstract or obtuse concepts but it does need to be insightful and provide a view of a subject that is refreshing and make people see something they don't think about everyday.
In this story, if you would have made the male lead a charming character who really dazzles the girl and truly wants to have a great time on the date we would have had greater appreciation for his character.
If the stalker girl was actually given something for her to love about him -- if something magical had happened for her than we would have a more significant connection to the story.
With women stalkers there are these things that trip off their fantasies and mind stories that lead them into an unrealism of thinking they are best for that man or own his best interests and affections. Your stalker needs those cues and we need to get more inside her head.
I didn't buy him. I didn't buy the stalker girl. I especially didn't buy that he knelt down and proposed to his girlfriend (there is nothing there) and I didn't buy that his girlfriend goes to the park, is upstaged by the stalker and then throws the ring at her.
Come on boys, grow up. Things don't happen this simply and superficially in life.
22 comments:
best video everrrrrrrrrrrrr
you guysrock
jokerzjinks
Awesome video! I was glad to be a part of this project. Let me know if you ever need another actor for anything else!
I love it! My favorite part was where Taylor entered the psycho's house and while she was getting the wine he straightened the painting.
:P
Good Job!!
Great video, definitely the clear winner!
Who's Taylor? I thought the leading man's name was Robert.
Ahhh, yes the tired old love triangle and scorned woman bent on revenge stereotype. "Tie Me Up, Tie Me Down" (a love story with strings attached) this is not. He goes to her apartment for "one last date" and she laces his drink with a sleep potion... come on guys use a little more imagination and less predictability.
didn't buy a second of this.
Whoe! This film should be committed, to the most predictable, and over used story plots hall of shame.
Again, you must have lots of your friend and family members voting!
Acting; Yuck
Directing: Yuck
Cinematography: Ok
Story: Yuck
Production Value: Yuck
Nice job Erik (NOT Eric)
what happened to the whole wedding dress idea at the end...?? this is clearly the best film... great job Erik and Greg!! i hope you win!
Movie was not that good. It sucked in my opinion and the story has been done a million times over. Please be creative and original next time.
Hi Erik thanks for the comment.
I also thought your film was good. I liked the way your story was put together; my favorite part was at the end when Robert was chained.
Cool vid.
I was the videographer and editor on Beam. I enjoyed your film. It was predictable like others have said, but that didn't bother me. The flow of the film and story tension kept me interested to the end. Have you produced any other films? If so, I'd like to check them out.
I liked this film. I knew where it was going, but it was entertaining.
The one thing in the story that I didn't get was why he agreed to go out with this woman again, when he obviously had no interested in her and she was TOTALLY INSANE!
Other than that, it was fun.
Hi Erik,
Thanks for your comments... sorry I did not get back to you earlier, but I'm posting from the remote office in WV (a.k.a. Mom's house), and web access is kind of sporadic.
While I do agree with some other's statements that I could tell where it was going from the beginning, it still held my attention. The soundtrack kept pulling me in for one, and the actress who played Caitlin was extremely convincing.
Ignore Movie Critic. He/she is a bastard with a superiority complex on a power kick. What type of constructive criticism is "yuck." He/she has all the articulation of a two-year-old.
What is the DEAL with the chain around his neck?
He is barely restrained. His hands are free and he could easily grab her or free himself.
I am expecting Kathy Bates in "Misery" with the plate of food and when we come walking through the door, and then we'll find James Caan strapped to the bed by angles and wrists and instead he is sitting with a flimsy chain around his neck.
Bogus! You've got to d a little reality check when shooting the film. Does his condition look like he is really confined and unable to get free?
I don't think so.
Erik,
It's Kellen from "Gutless Wonder". With all of the videos on here it's exciting to see the works of others and to be accompanied by many worthy participants. I believe that constructive criticism is one of the best things to hear, especially if it's presented in a suitable way. With your short, I believe that you have talent. And that's the key, because if you work hard you'll enhance your strengths.
I agree with some of the other comments that your story is a bit weak. This type of story has been done before, but there's always minor changes in the story that can be made to spice things up.
The music is worthy of noting. One suggestion is to not even have it playing in the beginning. Right when it came on I knew something bad was going to happen because of the mood of the music. Maybe start things out like they're pleasant, it's just another day for your main character. Then, when things start to get creepy with the girl kick in the music. Keep the viewer guessing constantly.
Another thing you can also corporate in your future films in to work with lighting. Lighting can do a lot. I never used to use it and many of my shots were dull and boring. Lighting can create depth and layers. You utilized this in the scene outside the house where he asks his girlfriend to marry him. One scene where I think you could have used some shadows is where she has him chained in the basement. That could make it very unsettling.
But hey, I'll shut up now. Sorry to write a novel on your comments page.
Overall, good job and keep at it.
Kellen
I think the main problem I had with this story is that I didn't like any of the characters. The guy was creepy and not likable, the stalker bitch was one dimensional and unsympathetic and even his brother and his girlfriend lacked motivation and integrity to make them interesting.
Women who stalk men for whom the hold affection or a fantasy of coupling could be a very interesting subject in short film. BUT you have to, a some point like and see the chemistry click between the stalker and her target.
I don't think you researched this topic at all. Do you or did you go to college? This was written as if you have never had much experience in life or if you went to a school where they never taught you to look below the surface of anything and dig for some deeper meaning.
Your film doesn't need to be complex or layered with abstract or obtuse concepts but it does need to be insightful and provide a view of a subject that is refreshing and make people see something they don't think about everyday.
In this story, if you would have made the male lead a charming character who really dazzles the girl and truly wants to have a great time on the date we would have had greater appreciation for his character.
If the stalker girl was actually given something for her to love about him -- if something magical had happened for her than we would have a more significant connection to the story.
With women stalkers there are these things that trip off their fantasies and mind stories that lead them into an unrealism of thinking they are best for that man or own his best interests and affections. Your stalker needs those cues and we need to get more inside her head.
I didn't buy him. I didn't buy the stalker girl. I especially didn't buy that he knelt down and proposed to his girlfriend (there is nothing there) and I didn't buy that his girlfriend goes to the park, is upstaged by the stalker and then throws the ring at her.
Come on boys, grow up. Things don't happen this simply and superficially in life.
yay fun film
yo why you hating
Dude just give up.
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